I wrote an article, can you guys tell me what yall think?
My society resides with in my mind and my computers. My mind and its voices that fuel the fire and causes the motivation to learn, to work, and to thrive. My computers and its ability to access unlimited amounts of knowledge and allows me to communicate with others like me. Others like str0ke, kl3pt0, f0rmat, Smaug, crash, n0bane, ant, NeWToN, SaTaNs_GuN, and ph33r. All outcasts of society in the physical world who thrive on the internet and rage with all the built hate caused by the phsycal world to others on the internet. People who are made fun of because we learn with every waking minute we live. People like you who ridicule people like us because we are smart and we never cheated on homework in school. We don't fail school because we're stupid,we fail because the things they teach us bores us and doesn't stress our mind. You ridicule us for spending vast amounts of time on a machine. You put us here. you made us what we are. We come here on our machines seeking knowledge,seeking friends, seeking a place to belong. This is our world. A world of endless possibilities, where location is irrelevant. This is where we belong. You call us criminals for what we do, because we explore, because we seek for knowledge like a bloody thirsty vampire seeks blood. The Mentor was right, we are all alike. But you, oh yes you. You make us what we are. You are the ones who forced us into our dark empty rooms. You are the ones who make us criminals. You make this society. One society of hate creates another. But wait, this society is more deeper and darker and we get bigger day by day. We have not one nationality but many. We have not one religious bias but many. We do not look the same nor come from the same place yet we are the same. We talk the same, think the same, feel the same, we are the same. You lie, cheat, murder, steal, ridicule and yet we are the criminals. Yes we are criminals but you put us here. Its your fault. You have created this monster of society. You casts us out like we're nothing, like we don't have feelings, like we don't exist. You ask us to stop but we can't. It's too late.What has been done can't be stopped. It grows larger and larger. As the great Loyd Blankenship (The Mentor) said, "You may stop this individual, but you can't stop us all… after all. we're all alike." Whats done is done and can't be stopped. This is our world now. This is what we've become. This is who we are. And if you don't like who we are then fuck you, again and again you put us down, made us feel like shit. Now the tables are turned, now we are the ones with the power and you sit there defenseless. You caused it, now you can't stop your creation, it's too late. We are hackers and this is who we are.
We talk the same, think the same, feel the same, we are the same. I disagree with that.
My opinion? It sounded like a recap of the Mentor's speel.
Should it be an article? Not for this forum. I believe you are preaching to the wrong crowd.
Why don't you give your article out to your school peers and see what they think. After all, is that not the kind of target audience that you are after?
@fallingmidget- Good thing that was in no way confusing at all.
I agree, though. When I first write something, I don't usually know what it's going to be, or how it's going to end- it just kind of…does. But, after the fact, I go through and edit it until it's nice and neat. So in a 'rough copy' like this, it's fine to have your thoughts jump around a lot and spelling/grammar problems here and there. Don't get me wrong, I think that what you wrote is awesome, but it just reminds me too much of The Manifesto. Oh, and there's a few spelling/grammar mistakes going on. Not that I'm a grammar nazi or anything, but I like to make sure my articles are…neat, I guess.
This.. sudden understanding of the world, this vast knowledge of our life, how did they come to you? Your epiphany is merely a made-up feeling of realization, this rhymes with your need to be special, be unique.
Unique you are not, knowledge you do not have. It's vagueness in which you thrive, darkness in which you flourish. Pouring out the depths of your soul, feeding us with truths and understanding? No, nothing of that, you are fabricating your own truth, merely an author of a vague text you are.
Not interesting, not interesting at all.
life is short and you're shorter. content before poetry. and be origional. I am also under the impression that you are interested the culture more than you represent it.
As for the drug thing, how did you get your computer again? I thought I heard you saying that you traded Zone_V a bunch of vikes and some cash. You were also able to get him vikes, but you don't know what state he lives in?
You don't add up.
there's too much plagiarism here, and the sentences are hard to read, and there are grammar and spelling errors here..
You need to see more and experience more to make your writing better, The Mentor, who wrote The Hacker's Manifesto, clearly had that.
I also recommend you read Lord Digital's now legendary essay.
This reminds me of (as mentioned before) Mentors work.
I think this is not all that original and it needs to be thought through more. Why do you state that because you are smart (IYO) that all others hate you? Perhaps it is you that cause said hate? Anti-Socialistic people bring hate upon themselves (Trust me I am somewhat anti-social) and they portray themselves in a way that people dislike.
I think this is more a rant that you wanted to put out to make yourself the next mentor. You need to rethink this entire "article" and look over exactly what you are trying to say. I have only ever failed one class in my lifetime and that was Math…the reason I failed this class is the teacher did not like me proving her wrong and not showing up to her classes. So your statements are some what wrong. But hey, It is good for a first draft :P
Try to mull over it a bit more when you have slept and perhaps mull over it some more when you have a few beers in you. These two states will keep your mind open in different ways and allow you to see this from all sides of the fence. This is just my opinion of course and I am just a little Peon in this world but I would seriously look this over again and ensure that it is 100% what you are trying to say. If it is exactally what you believe then release it. but remember, like society, the internet society is made up of people :evil: